The description went well until you started talking about writing. Also regardless of what gender pronoun you prefer, if you're going to be ambiguous about it but then go to say "mistaken for a boy", on top of being the prince of sound, why not just make the character male altogether?

>>3745
The joke is that the game itself mistook her for a boy.

Somehow I don't think that's how the game actually works :|

It made sense in my head? (Not a valid excuse. I know. :P) I think I'll make her a boy after all. Less horribly confusing.

Don't get me wrong, I'm not against a transgender type character at all, its just the description doesn't lead me to believe that that's what the character is at all. Does Jean like being mistaken for a boy? Does she want to be mistaken for a boy? The summary leads me to believe she has a passive attitude toward it which most people tend to.. not have, if they're not genderqueer. Besides, being passive about her own gender while being particular about how her name is pronounced sort of contradicts itself in a way.

I do understand what you're saying. She's not supposed to be trangender and she is rather passive about her gender. (I guess the closest description is that she views herself as... Androgynous? I'm not 100% certain on the terminology for that.) Her title is actually supposed to be a shout out to Revolutionary Girl Utena in a way, but it got a bit muddled in translation from my head to the the character herelf.

She prefers her name to be pronounced as the Frnach masculine version, but that's simply because she likes the way it sounds more.

Concrit: it's an okay character, but bland. The only thing that makes her stand out from the middle-of-the-road is her thing for musicals. The androgyny could be used for a Comdey-of-Errors in the romance parts of the story, but you stated "she doesn't correct people," so it seems you're not going to use it like that.

Protip: get some elements of the character that make her different from the crowd, and turn them up to 11. ie: Dave isn't just cool, he is THE COOLKID with his own DJ set-up and never takes his shades off, even for the adoring fans of his webcomic. Nana doesn't just bake cookies, she's the adopted daughter of BETTY CROCKER HERSELF, and her idea of a little snack for the imps is to fill a house with pies.

Note that this doesn't mean they are the best at what they do, or what they do will solve their problems, but it does make the characters easier to identify and will make it easier for you to write their behaviour.

>>3752
I was afraid of her being too bland, actually. I want to exaggerate one of her traits, but I'm entirely unsure of which one. I think I'll go with exagerating her love of theatre. (Her domain is Sound after all.)

I changed it a bit. (The pic is her new bio. I changed her intro and her Perterchum handle.)

New opinions?

>>3756
I love her new chumhandle especially - it ties the androgyny and the love for theater together so nicely. Maybe she even enjoys her androgyny a little because of takarazuka?